My Up Comeing Fan Fiction.
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As promised here is a preview of my wonderful new fan fiction;
Treguard sat in his antechamber and gave a sigh. It had been ten years since the last quest had been brought to a swift end thanks to phase shift. The dungeon often took a long time to shift back into phase but this was the longest wait by far. After the 8th phase then much changed in the dungeon, Majida had longed to see the world, which was wider than the dusty old antechamber.
Treguard had granted her this wish and now he was alone. Treguard wouldn’t mind this too much, he had been alone for 3 phases and he’d got along fine, besides he loved the peace and quiet. However he missed the great battle with the opposition and the constant struggle between good and evil, seeing if the brave dungeoneer had what it took to pass the trials and tribulations of the dungeon. Yet now he had little to do but polish the helmet of justice, clean various relics and items and reminisce about old times.
It was on one of these long days when he was halfway through re reading “Potions and Spells for all Occasions” when the communications pool began to splash and activates. Treguard took a brisk walk towards it hoping for some news, anything to add a bit of the old spice back into his life. A face appeared in the pool; it was the face of Hordriss the Confuser, and Hordriss looked delighted with himself, which Treguard assumed to mean he had something to brag about. Treguard prepared to humour Hordriss.
“One hopes one finds you well Dungeon Master” Hordriss said without giving Treguard time to answer, “One is most pleased to inform you that the dungeon is shifting back into phase. One supposes you had better prepare yourself and your dungeoneers for this phase shall be the toughest ever!”
Had Hordriss not been watching then Treguard would’ve jumped for joy. Treguard said a hasty goodbye to Hordriss and then sent out scrolls to those who had volunteered to take up the challenge. Time was turning, Treguard himself could feel the dungeon moving and twisting itself into shape. His day had just got a lot better.
Opinions? Reactions?
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This is certainly not just a criticism of this fic, Bob. It's a problem with a number of fanfics I've read that try to put forward the story of the dungeon's rebirth... there's not much explanation for why it went away in the first place, or for why it came back. It feels a teeny bit lazy when the overall gist seems to be, "Well it just was, live with it."
I hope you'll try to offer some explanations for it at some point in the story.
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I can see HStorm's point, I have to say. I do like the fic so far, on the whole. I'm not 100% sure about the characterisation of Treguard, but I guess we just see him a bit differently, or would focus on exploring his character in different ways. It'll be good to read more, anyway.
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Yeah, I don't want you to think I'm knocking what you HAVE written, Bob, it's bubbling along okay for the moment, I'm just saying that there's a pretty serious ommission.
It's a bit like if you've been living with someone for years and they suddenly walk out on you without the slightest explanation (which is essentially what happened to all of us when KM was axed). Ten years later they suddenly show up on the doorstep demanding you let them move back in with you...
"But... why did you leave?"
"I just did."
"What happened to you?"
"This and that."
"Where have you been all this time?"
"Here and there."
"What have you been doing?"
"Oh y'know."
On that kind of basis, you wouldn't let them move back in with you, would you?
On the same basis, if I was Treguard (or speaking just as a reader) I'd like some explanation for why the dungeon just vanished into limbo for ten years before I can accept a story that brings it back. I feel cheated otherwise.
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I hope no-one minds if I blow my own trumpet on someone else's bandstand...
There is a new KM fanfic. I have just posted the complete version of my latest story, 'I, Julius', at http://www.fanfiction.net/read.php?storyid=1709231. Hopefully, it adds to KM in a way that anyone who chooses to read it will enjoy.
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(Atmosfear... the game you accused me of plagiarising on your site? ;D Sounds like fun.)
There's no rush to give feedback at all.
The story is set in Series 5 of KM, and features many characters who have been seen before; and many who have merely been talked about...
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The party starts at twenty to midnight and won't finish till after 4am, so we'll haev to wait and see how much fun it really is. I'm playing Baron Samedi by the way! "Thrrrrill me!"
There's a trick you can play that sometimes makes new stories appear more quickly on ff.net.Find the tab that changes the order that stories in a particular section are listed. Switch it from the default arrangement and it MIGHT show the new stories straight away (although not always).
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The first game of Atmosfear was won in under half an hour by the birthday boy, so I decided I'd take the extra time avaiilable to read through your fanfic now. It's a classy bit of work, and I recommend it wholeheartedly, even to those who're not fans of Quantum Leap.
Must dash. We're about to start Atmosfear II, and I'm holding everyone else up!
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Right, most of the critisms seem to be aimed at how the dungeon has returned. May I point out that my fan fiction is NOT based about the dungeon returning, instead a paralell world comes into the dungeon portal instead. If this one is a success then I may write one when the real dungeon returns and write a good explaination about it, however try not to critise me too much for not including irrelevant information in the fan fic.
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Hello
I got a bit bored listening to Eurovision last night and started to pen down a fanfic story. Ive uploaded the pages to the net and you can find them here:
http://groups.msn.com/Pipmuk/shoebox.msnw
Youre free to download the image and resize it if you cant see it...
Hope you like it! If lots of people like it then i will write some more! Any comment is welcome, good or bad.
Pipmuk
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Sorry, Pipmuk, I can scarcely read it.
May I recommend you copy the story out into Wordpad or something and then upload it to www.fanfiction.net?
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I've written a Knightmare Fan Fic enitiled Series 9.
That's right it's Series 9 of Knightmare in Story format.
http://www.fanfiction.net/read.php?storyid=1882407
Please Read & Review and post you thoughts about it.
And...
LIVE IN FEAR!!!
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Well, I'm not sure what to say because I started to read it and didn't want to review without finishing it, but personally I'm finding it fairly difficult to read since it is more like a script than a piece of fiction. I actually didn't think ff.net allowed stuff in script form (don't quote me on that) but I suppose if you don't get caught you're fine
Either way, personally I'm having difficulty plodding through it. If you'd like to make it a little more reader friendly for a wider audience, perhaps you could put it into prose form, it may help, but this is nothing more than a suggestion since I may well be the only one struggling with it.
"(Treguard walks into his anti-chamber with his sword out.)" did make me giggle though. Bad Emii
I'm throwing an Atmosfear party tonight (yes, that damned board game again!) for my brother's birthday, so I won't be able to read it till tomorrow. I'll give you some feedback tomorrow afternoon though, word of honour!Hello! It looks like you're interested in this conversation, but you don't have an account yet.
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